The island of O'ahu has so much more to it than just the beautiful beaches, the gorgeous hula dancers, the wonderful weather, those scenic helicopter tours, etc. Its background is based on a very rich history. There is a lot of knowledge hiding behind the curtains. From the very first ali'i or chief king of the island, to the conquering of the other 7 islands of Hawaii, to the overthrow of the Hawaiian monarchy, to the loss of our island's individuality, to the time we officially became the 50th state of the US. The beauty of the island is hiding beneath the bosom of the smiling faces all around. We, here, do still get stereotyped with the usual questions such as, "Can you read? What's it like, living in a grass hut? Is it comfortable to go around in a grass skirt and a coconut bra?" and what not. What some people fail to notice is we are just like them and there is not much that makes us differ from them. It is just that we have a bigger, more in-depth history. Though, we do have something that makes us unique. O'ahu is flooded with many natural cultural and historical landmarks. O'ahu is flooded with many developed and if we're lucky, undeveloped ahupuaa's or land divisions from mountain to sea still standing. That is what makes us unique.
The island has many cultural and historical landmarks, both developed and undeveloped. Finding undeveloped landmarks on the islands is a very rare thing, especially considering how modernized we've gotten over the past years. Lucky for O'ahu, there are still several landmarks that have been untouched. One would be Kamananui Valley, also known as Moanalua Valley. Alongside Kamananui Valley being known as Moanalua Valley, it was also considered as The Damon Estate. Before Samuel Mills Damon, the 3,716 acre valley was owned by Kamehameha the Great or King Kamehameha I. That of whom was the very first ruler of the Hawaiian islands. Princess Bernice Pauahi Paki Bishop, the great-granddaughter of King Kamehameha I, was the one who willed the valley to Samuel Mills Damon when she died in 1884.
The island has many cultural and historical landmarks, both developed and undeveloped. Finding undeveloped landmarks on the islands is a very rare thing, especially considering how modernized we've gotten over the past years. Lucky for O'ahu, there are still several landmarks that have been untouched. One would be Kamananui Valley, also known as Moanalua Valley. Alongside Kamananui Valley being known as Moanalua Valley, it was also considered as The Damon Estate. Before Samuel Mills Damon, the 3,716 acre valley was owned by Kamehameha the Great or King Kamehameha I. That of whom was the very first ruler of the Hawaiian islands. Princess Bernice Pauahi Paki Bishop, the great-granddaughter of King Kamehameha I, was the one who willed the valley to Samuel Mills Damon when she died in 1884.
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ReplyDelete"From the very first ali'i or chief king of the island, to the conquering of the other 7 islands of Hawaii, to the overthrow of the Hawaiian monarchy, to the loss of our island's individuality, to the time we officially became the 50th state of the US"
This sentence doesn't tell us anything, and it way too long. Also you need to get into your subtopic sooner. There is a lot of "fluff" in the beginning paragraph that almost serves no purpose to your essay. Please make the changes. AS(2)